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A Blood too thin... by ~Ass-Soul:iconAss-Soul:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Song


Turn to me, Like I was told how,
Turn to me, Please wake up Darling,
Turn to me, We will be us now,
Turn to me, Can you hear me calling?

Wake to me, Oh God it’s Horrid,
Wake to me, Living without life,
Wake to me, You're gonna love it,
Wake to me, My cold and dead wife,

You and me!
We will be!
Eternally!
Youthful and Free!

Turn to me, This way we’re allowed,
Turn to me, Love me my Darling,
Turn to me, See we are us now,
Turn to me, Feel it now calling,

You and me!
We will be!
Eternally!
Youthful and free!

Wake to me, It’s not so Horrid,
Wake to me, We do not need life,
Wake to me, I told you you’d love it.
Wake to me, A Perfect undead wife.

You and me!
We will be!
Eternally!
Youthful and free!

Wake to me, Oh god its horrid,
Wake to me, Living without life,
Wake to me, I thought that you’d love it,
Wake to me, What Have I Done?

Turn to me, But I was told how?
Turn to me, please wake up Darling,
Turn to me, Wont we be us now?
Turn to me, God please hear me calling!
©2005-2009 ~Ass-Soul
:iconass-soul:

Author's Comments

Based on a Story from the V:tM rule book, though i guess it could be attached to a few different scenarios.

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~YumeNoInu Dec 21, 2005, 9:55:50 PM
i really like this. it's so strong! :+fav:

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~* I'm fighting the world and myself at the same time....
I'm loosing....*~
:iconboondock-angel:
~Boondock-Angel Dec 22, 2005, 12:12:19 AM
awesome stuff Brodes

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Angel in low places
:iconiburni:
~IBuRNI Dec 22, 2005, 5:50:22 AM
Strong theme as usual. New structure YAY. I finished the first follow on from "something often ignored" ur friends should check it out. I've decided to just continue the philosophy of grey ;) l8r
:iconhaylez:
~Haylez Dec 23, 2005, 12:00:55 AM
:D Nice work. Strong vibes. Tis great.

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Splendid! This calls for a sexy party!
:iconkezbez22:
~kezbez22 Dec 23, 2005, 4:00:45 AM
i like how you keep repeating the phrases "turn to me" and "wake to me", its good
:iconturiya:
~turiya Dec 26, 2005, 5:30:31 AM
it's awesome, wonders if you might consider changing the structure a little though?
Since it's a song, i thought it might work if maybe you put the repeated phrases as separate lines, in italics... Just a suggestion, think it might enhance the overall effect a little, it's useful in lyricism anyway i think...

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"i think of myself as an intelligent, sensitive human with the soul of a clown, which always forces me to blow it at the most important moments" - j. morrison
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~samisox Jan 18, 2006, 10:50:30 PM
im jealous of ur talents...
:(
that rocks.

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'JESUS, more hobbledehoys. YOU CANT LEAVE ALONE WITH THEM! THEYRE ALL OVER THE PLACE LIKE A NEST OF PIGS!!'
Bernard Black.

MY STOCK ACCOUNT: [link]
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~bbelill May 15, 2008, 2:28:07 PM
it is a bit sad, beautiful, but sad.

great job :hug:

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Ceade mile failte

Come away! O, human child!
To the woods and waters wild,
With a fairy hand in hand,
For the world's more full of weeping than
you can understand-W.B. Yeats :icongeekflirt:
:iconass-soul:
~Ass-Soul May 15, 2008, 6:09:43 PM
I'll Sad you!

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MYSTIC SPIRAL CONSUMES MY ASS IN A CLOUD OF LEAVES FALLING FROM THE MOONS GRACE... do i fit in here yet? Didn't think so... Olive Juice Too!
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